Monday 21 February 2011

First draft of 'the meeting' PItch

I have to admit I have found writing this pitch very difficult to convey the amount of tension and drama in 25 words is close to impossible, but here's what I came up with.  

A race against time as the fire services’ finest fight to save a trapped boy’s life, this meeting will change the course of lives forever.  

What you think? Any ideas on how I can improve it?

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